Classwork 7

 My partner has a very interesting hook in her intro paragraph. She has good facts, but she could use some more tags. Her paragraphs don’tover repeat themselves. Her paragraphs are in order and they make sense. Her conclusion paragraph sums up the other paragraphs and it makes her idea sound really good.

My partner gave me a B. I needed to fix my topic and conclusion sentences. Also I needed to replace my “…” with a comma. ALso my First concrete detail was not a real fact.  I need to fix my first and second sentence in my chunk paragraphs. In my second paragraph I restate a fact about spill proof trach cans.

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